What do u think about this poem that i wrote?

Question

A feeling of apathy is growing inside me

People made me what I didn't want to be

Careless, angry, sad...is there more to say?

Those feelings grow more and more everyday

I can't tolerate this cause it's driving me insane

Just put yourself in my place and feel my pain

How does it feel to be excluded and all alone?

How does it feel to do everything on your own?

I feel empty from inside cause of my lost love

Now, pride and confidence are all what I have

I will only trust myself and I will never give up

I will never fall again into another person's trap

Answer 1

I wish someone could explain why 30 people a day put poetry in here "by mistake".  it's not that hard

Answer 2

Although I don't agree with everything the poem says, it is raw but beautiful, showing the churning emotions of someone hurt and confused.

Answer 3

It rhymes, good timing-but I really don't like the second line at all.  Abe Lincoln said people are about as happy as they make their minds up to be.  This poem makes me mad because the subject sounds like he/she is whining and feeling sorry for himself/herself.

Answer 4

good ryming and nicely written



               GREAT JOB !

Answer 5

Beautifully done!

I like the message for you have the courage to combat failure. You want to brave and stand up for what you think is the best for you.

Thanks for sharing. Have  a great day!

Answer 6

Sometime's we are characters in other people's stories, without our blessing and even without our knowing, but then we must live with our very real feelings when that story is over. Look out for those who might write you into their stories without your consent, but don't spend too much time avoiding every person you suspect might do this. You would never know that you had a heart unless something poked it, nor a brain unless something troubled it. I like your poem. Good luck.

Answer 7

I love it. You seem to really speak honestly and from the heart. It sounds like you have recovered from deep pain -good job. if you haven't hold on there because many of us are feeling pain too.

Answer 8

Great poem and feelings a lesson learned through experience of love of another love traps are not a good thing love should always be given freely and never forced we must all have our own identities and not depend on another to fix our lives we must be whole and love another the same way for love is beautiful when grows and is given equally and forever never give up on you for the right love will shine through :)))