What do u think of my new poem? It's called "Finding My voice"?

Question

This poem is not that good n a little crazy lol but give me ur honest opinion. thx

"Finding My voice"

I'm hearing so many voices in my head

But out of all these I can't seems to find mine

My own voice which is completely dead

They say listen to your heart

When Your are lost in confusions

Surely this is no delusion

I don't know which way to turn

Or which place to run

But can I only make up my mind

When my eyes are blind

Of course I want to listen to your wishes

and grant them as you pleases

And I would do anything

Too see those smiles

Then what about my happiness

Who's going to grant them

When I don't even seem to care

No, I wouldn't dare

To wish for my own selfish desires

Oh how can I disappoint those

Who I owe so much

Or is it just an another excuse

From my coward side

A coward who's afraid

To admit the result of this fight

now where is my own voice?

Hmmm I'm still not sure

But filling other gaps sure was fun

From now on let's live for my own life.

Answer 1

I like the line "i can only make up my mind when my eyes are blind"

well said.

Answer 2

People on YA r always downing other peoples art. HATERS!!!!!!!! Don't listen to any of them.

Answer 3

well, u may wanna try the poetry section, instead of Philosophy

Answer 4

Actually I think it is pretty good, it does belong in the poetry section of Yahoo, not many critiques will you find here! I am mostly in the poetry section, once in awhile I will go somewhere different like here!

I am going to give you a star, so my contacts who are mostly in the poetry section will have a chance to read this and give you some constructive help, I believe that is what your looking for!

Cheers!!

Answer 5

it suks

Answer 6

dont really like it