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What do u think of my poem? opinions...?

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"Is There Light in the Dark?"

The sun brightens the day

The moon shines in the night

A candle is your light

When you are surrounded by the dark

If you’re ever in the shadows

Feeling blackness all around

When you need a candle to guide you home

Remember I’ll be here

I am your sun.

its a poem i just wrote and i wanted some opinions on it. feel free to share.

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  1. its good

    but i don't rele feel a rythem to it

    but thats just me

    words are great tho

    answer mine?

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  2. cool xD

  3. nice

  4. good :]

  5. umm not bad...like it =]

  6. I like it a lot :)

  7. That's a really good poem. I like it a lot. Very well constructed, and very well worded. But, for structure purposes, maybe you should let the last line have it's own stanza. Like so:

    "The sun brightens the day

    The moon shines in the night

    A candle is your light

    When you are surrounded by the dark

    If you’re ever in the shadows

    Feeling blackness all around

    When you need a candle to guide you home

    Remember I’ll be here

    I am your sun."

    It makes it look better. =]

  8. beautiful :]

  9. its BEAUTIFUL   i actually almost cried   you should definately write some more and put on here for me to read   im a poetry junkie

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