What do u think of this poem i made? it's entitled as "A Serpent's Labyrinth".comments and opinions please.tnx

Question

wandering through d ruins of d past

hope is gone,nothing left even a dust

tears fell as I gaze upon d grey skies

had enough 2 roll another dice

nver thought dis wil hurt me so much

should I suffer 4 giving all my trust?

so u betrayed me,as u always did

feed me more apathy,den watch me bleed

d words we whispered in d ears of d lords

just lingered at d walls of dark corridors

i've searched 4 a bag of love & conscience

but I got enslaved behind ur cold fences

playing blind 2 those s***s you put me through

scenes of vituperation 4 me's not new

i've let my neck strangled & learned how 2 take

yet in d end,u're d 1 who turned 2 snake

now,unwrap me from ur cruel fingers

who anguish souls 4 its own desires

let me go out of dis mist-filled labyrinth

so dat I will learn again how 2 breathe

worse than a traitor who slew it's own brethren

dis foolishness shall meet its fateful end

now, as this tears keep drowning me in despair

tormented,blindfolded,I seek d open air

Answer 1

It sounds almost epic, like a dungeons & dragons feel.  You obviously wrote this in anger, but some of the best poetry is produced when real emotion is put into it.  Also, you may be more likely to get more responses to your question if you spell out the numbers and abbreviations you use...it just makes it difficult for answerers to read.

Answer 2

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!