What do u think of this poem ????

Question

I ask myself

who is that,

staring back at me?

i wonder when the mirror

will truly reflect who i am

or how i feel

And I fear I do not have an answer,

the harder I stare

the more angry I become.

I begin to cry,

my tears are black,

and staining my face.

And I punch the mirror

in the center,

right where I stand, broken.

My mirror now reflects my heart,

fragile and shattered,

broken.

Answer 1

I like it! Just keep in mind your punctuation and capitalization.

Answer 2

I really like the detail and imagery in this piece! I love the emotion and the vulnerability! It was short but I liked it!

Answer 3

     I'm not a poet, but I think that's very good.  Keep writing, please!  The mirror metaphor is excellent.  Well done

Good luck

Mike B

Answer 4

Very light verse w/ a heavy message.I like it regardless of every thing else even the spilled mascara. Write more.. I'm waiiiiting !

Answer 5

just... WOW... ur a amazing writer keep it up. (:

that's like my new favorite poem i've ever read.

-XobabyygiirloX ♥  

Answer 6

not bad, but i wish it was more detail oriented telling "why" you feel this way. From a 3rd person point of view, you just look crazy. Sorry, I hope that didnt sound mean, but I think if you keep working on this, it has the potential to be a great poem. Please repost again, if you decide to keep working on this one. Its still good though, please review mine.

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