What do u think of this story...have u ever felt this way?

Question

My wrists are tied & my hands are broken.

My mouth stitched shut without words spoken.

As i hang my head low & look to the ground.

I see my feet strapped to a chair & bound.

Every wall so close as if I weren't sane.

With water covering the one window pane.

I stare out the window without a blink.

How did this happen is all I could think.

The room so quiet with only me there.

The walls with no door so explain the chair.

The is for me & today for my heart.

I was torn, it was shattered & so ripped apart.

The light seemed dim as I looked at the glass.

The water not rain but tears come to pass.

This must be the end of a god awfull dream.

My face turns red as I start to scream.

I put myself here in the dark & alone.

But what comes next is the only unknown.

I'll let myself out of this darkened room.

If I can't, I beg, please help me soon.

Answer 1

    Very good indeed.  I think it's an excellent effort.  The only change I'd be inclined to make would be in the second line.

     Instead of  'My mouth stitched shut without words spoken.'

     Perhaps 'My mouth stitched shut with words unspoken.'

     And instead of 'This must be the end of a God awful dream.'

     Maybe            'Is this the end of some terrible dream?'

     Just an idea.  But it's first class, I think.

Good luck

Mike B

Answer 2

One word: Awesome