What do you all think of this?, it's in my style.?

Question

Confusion.

Situations unclear,

The mind in confusion,

Lost in a thought,

Of ample repulsions,

Clever wit from an elder,

Wisdom and honour,

The path is unearthing,

Situation is dire,

It all will come clear,

Focus and listen,

Your destiny is mapped,

You’ll grow and glisten.

Answer 1

This beautiful poem seems to be a journey from confusion to enlightenment. There is even a hint of meditation in the words "focus and listen".  It evolves gracefully from "lost in a thought" to "Your destiny is mapped". I love this.  Thank you.

Answer 2

Its free verse really. Its good enough I feel to appeal to a lot of people.

Answer 3

Its quite interesting, but it does fit the title...it's kind of confusing! It doesn't really give a clear image of anything, a time, a place, a person, an object....it's a bit vague.

I quite like it, but perhaps if you twist it a little bit, just to give an image of soemthing, even just a swirling mass or whatever :)

Answer 4

Fantastic, well written, your styleof poetry always appeals to me, well done.

Answer 5

2 pts