What do you guys think of my poem?

Question

I`m gonna live forever

light up the sky like a flame

I`ll never cry

remember my name

the girl who lives

all attractive

and perfectly live

everything good follows her

and bad moves out of the way

dont let her go

I cant let anyone go

my friends

all of you are

I feel

and want to know

all good people

and want you

to want to know me

and keep me

it was kinda random and doesn`t always ryme but it DOES make sence lol

can you relate and understand? =)

Answer 1

i can relate awesome poem .!

Answer 2

It's pretty good, and made sense to me, but you should practise more. You'll get better and be able to write things like this that rhyme better.

Keep up the good work!

Answer 3

i like it!

the first part reminds me of the song "fame" from flashdance, actually

Answer 4

No, sorry. It's not at all good, I can say that because  I write poems as well. It does'nt precisely make much sense to me, sorry.

Answer 5

I love it - very personal.

Answer 6

i don't know if i can relate it but it sounds good