What do you guys think of this? please help me! please...?

Question

Hi,

i need to write a really short poem about jesus for my religion class. this is why ive written

Jesus our holyman

A hand so strong, a light so bright

a glorious father, his way so right

his grace so saving, his touch so healing

jesus so good, i love him so

what do you guys think?

Answer 1

pretty good

Answer 2

that's good but why do you have to ask it on yahoo anyway?

Answer 3

it's nice. :D

Answer 4

Though He did create the world and all its creatures, Jesus would never take on the role of the Father. But if "father" in your poem doesn't mean that, you'll want to add something else in your poem to make sure you aren't misinterpreted.

Answer 5

its fine , i dont like the last line.