What do you guys thinkof my poem ( I had to short form you/u to have enough room)?

Question

There is a moment in our lives

when we exceed ourselves

and make a friendship grow stronger

But in that moment u could care less

cause you're enjoying every second of it

And there comes a time when u miss your friendship

and u feel like its wrong

soon u find it truly is wrong or u just need to be alone

But u don't know how to explain to him whats going on

He's to sweet and inocent

And thats when u know that you're not strong

Or atleast not enough to tell him.

U get lost deep in your thoughts

suddenly u just explode, and break the heart of the one you love most

U can see it in the way he acts, he hides behind hair

to hide his tears

He just looks for someone to hold, cause u just distroid every hope. U lost a friend, u lost a lover.And dont have the guts to talk about it, & then u decide to be a ghost

so u can't hurt him anymore

And thats when u know you will live your life alone

Forever Now.

Answer 1

I'm not exactly sure about how I feel for this poem. The poem reads more like a short story than an actual poem. Still, I really do like the theme of this poem, although I really was a bit annoyed by how it was made into short form (not your fault) because it kind of killed the flow. But I really liked when you wrote 'There is a moment in out lives / When we exceed ourselves'...I just really liked that :]

Answer 2

I like it! Very deep and thoughtful. (: