What do you thing of this...?

Question

For every tear that falls

I will be there for you

For every inch of pain that you feel I will feel it to

I will be there for you through thick and thin

I will be your rock when you need me to be

I will always be there for you

For every heart ache you feel

I feel it to

For every ounce of misery you feel

I feel it to

What ever you do that makes you hurt

I will feel it

Love isn't something that you or I can run from

It's a feeling like no other

When you cry

I will cry with you

Through thick and thin I will always be there for you

When you feel like you have nothing left to live for

Remember me

I will always be there for you

For every time you smile

I will smile with you

For every tear that you cry out of joy

I will cry with you

I will always be there for you

Answer 1

creo que a quien se lo dedicaste es afortunada

solo por curiosidad ¿tienes galana?

Answer 2

Eliseo

Si ...

beso

Answer 3

This is really beautiful, If it were dedicated to me, I would truly cry of joy, I give it an 11 out of 10 and I hope you dont mind if I save the poem, its beautiful

Answer 4

i really like it. you got your point across. but there are some things you might want to change to make it flow better:

"For every inch of pain that you feel I will feel it to"

"For every bit of pain you feel I will feel it too"

"I will be there for you through thick and thin" < you say this line twice. try to avoid repetition.

"I will be your rock when you need me to be"

"I will be your (rock, firm/solid ground, foundation)

when you cannot stand"

"For every heart ache you feel

I feel it to

For every ounce of misery you feel

I feel it to

What ever you do that makes you hurt

I will feel it" <again try to avoid repitition.

"For every heart ache you feel

My heart will ache too

For every ounce of misery you feel

I feel it too

What ever happens that makes you hurt

I will hurt too"

"Love isn't something that you or I can run from"

"Love is something that neither you nor/or I can run from"

"When you cry

I will cry with you...

...For every tear that you cry out of joy

I will cry with you" < repetition

try : "I shall cry too"

"I will always be there for you" < you repeat this line multiple times try to avoid repitition.

these are a few things you can try. i know i pointed out alot of the repition.... but i hope it helps!

Answer 5

It's Good.

P.S. :_ How are you intending to choose a best answer for this question?

Answer 6

that please write beautiful poetry in Spanish is better listen

Answer 7

Very well,indeed.

Answer 8

I think this is a beautiful poem - whoever it's about is very lucky!

Just one correction though: it should be 'I feel it too' not 'I feel it to'. This is only a minor error - the rest of it is excellent.

Please write more poems as you seem to have flair for it!

Good luck with your future endeavours

x

Answer 9

that's really good!!!

it would make a great song!!!!

keep up the good work  ;)

Answer 10

Sounds more like lyrics to a song than an actual poem.

Answer 11

It's overly repetitious.. also, to in most places you've used it, should be too.

Answer 12

You know what I think about you. I really enjoy when you write.

And I think there is no problem with the Repetition. This is a poetry.When you repeat, you're showing your feelings with emphasis.

I am not a writer. But I still trying.

Greetings!

Answer 13

really good!

Answer 14

To whom is dedicated this poem?