What do you think about my poem?

Question

Nightmare

Pain controls my life

he chooses my every step

and when I think that I can take no more

I hear the voice of death

he says he's my way out

he says come be with me

he says just listen to the words I say

and I will set you free

but what will I have to do I say

he says soon enough you'll know

just do what I say and don't look back

and pain will let you go

tell me what to do I say

to finally win this game

just close your eyes and don't look back

and you'll be free of pain

ok now that I've done

now have I won the game

no there's one more thing that you must do

to rid yourself of pain

well tell me what it is

this I need to know

just pull the trigger and don't look back

and pain will let you go

suicide you speak of

this I ask you why

cause pain will choose your every step

until the day you die

this I cannot do

I'd rather live than die

then pain will choose your every step

and he will take your life

but pain is not that bad

he's only here at times

only when i see her face

or dream of her hazel eyes

but the pain you cannot bear it

this is why you choose the blade

and you try to hide the dark-red cuts

that the steel has made

I only tried it once or twice

now I turn to friends

but you know that deep inside your heart

they just don't understand

these words I speak are true

your friends just don't know pain

and if you never pull the trigger

you'll always play this game

but what if I don't like it

and I want to be alive

well I am death I'll bring you back

I'll bring you back to life

well then I guess I'll do it

to rid myself of pain

well then pull the trigger and don't think twice

and I swear you'll win this game

my hand is on the gun now

and then I start to cry

and halfway there I realize

that I don't want to die

I try to stop myself

but Death controls my hands

I tell him I don't want to die

but he tells me its the end

the gun is to my head now

tonights the night I die

and as I'm crying crimson tears

I say my last goodbye

Death makes me pull the trigger

but no one hears the shot

and as I take my final breath

my heart begins to stop

death has made me do it

when he said come be with me

I'm lying on the ground not moving

and don't feel very free

and with a single thread of hope

as I'm holding on to life

I whisper God don't let me go

and the dark consumes the light

thats one more lost redemption

and one more boy was broken

my life was lost because of her

because of her words unspoken

and as I'm drifting through the darkness

my nightmare finally ends

I'm lying in my bed now

and the light is shining in

I get out of my bed

and as I fall down to my knees

I say thank you God for showing me

that DEATH WONT SET ME FREE

Answer 1

woah is that deep. i got bored of reading it tho nbc i have a rly short attention span when it comes to deep stuff but i have firneds who would literally write that down on thir cells and foward it ot everyone they know ( they read a poem written on a table and did that )

im new and so id really appriciate a best answer-