What do you think about the first half of my poem?

Question

I posted an earlier draft a few weeks ago:

On the banks of mighty Helford River

Little stirs tonight save ripples white

Sparkling by moon and stars up hither

Villagers have said their last “goodnights”

-Alone

But then there is me, body and spirit . . .

I see a dancer on the ripples

Under old thatched roof do I now see it

I scrutinize it, on the waters . . .

Narrow my eyes, staring at the dancer

See now – the dancer is a woman

Dancing on the moonlit bed of water

A fiery tribal dance – a phantom?

Hair flowing wildly like that of a Greek

Goddess, intoxicated motion

But with so much beauty that I can’t speak

Nor can I rouse myself to action

Answer 1

Very deep and meaningful! You should enter a contest!

Answer 2

This is very imaginative,ethereal, and also written well.  I would love to read the whole poem.  It's a wonderful start that stirs my curiousity about the last half. Thank you.

Answer 3

this is very advanced..how long have you been writing?

Answer 4

as i read your poem

i imagine the greek lady dancing

i love it

Answer 5

Very discriptive and such unique words.

I must say,You are a Teriffic Poet!