What do you think about this? I am trying to start writing again.?

Question

Too Live Again

Words can not describe the hurt I feel inside.

I feel torn and shredded up like a used piece of paper.

Just throw me away…

Words can not describe how its feels inside,

when someone makes you cry so much you can’t anymore.

Its just all gone worry, fear, a smile….

Words can not describe the pain from a decision so great,

Life or death basically

You are my life and somehow I have to let you go…

Words have described many times the pain, anger, fear and hurt,

But it never seemed to matter

Maybe for a week or two…….

This is me describing your Loss and my gain

ME

Written by: Amanda Desselle

Answer 1

I like it :) This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 2

Interesting... has potential, but I think it could be better.  I'm not sure the repetition works here ("Words..." etc.).  Keep at it!