What do you think about this poem is it any good

Question

the way of the lost

when we see the way it is easy to go to where we need to be but

when we can not see the way how do we find where it is that we call

home?

how do we know that we are missing something if we can not feel the

hole it has made in our heart?

when i was on my way i found that the way i was going was not the way to what i need but i could not see what i need

how could we see what it is we are going to if we can not see where we have

been?

how can the heart tell you anyhting you need to know it you will not here its

cry?

when you do here the hearts cry will you know what its saying or will you think

is just the wind?

when i knew the way i was going was not for me i heard a sound but i could not know what the sound was i knew that the sound was for me but why?

when the heart and soul are one the mind will tell you what to do to find your way

if your dark angel was to try and help your heart and soul be one what would you think of her?

would you think she was your way or she was just looking for her way?

when you have seen her heart will you know what to do?

when you see her heart will you know your way?

will you see the way to be happy is to help the dark angel find her way

that sometimes the way is just a way to show others the way?

when i was talking to my dark angel i knew the way for me was to show her love and to see that she finds her way back to where she is loved.

at that time my heart and soul where one and my mind was able to see for a minute all there was to see in her heart and mind was open like a book.

she wanted me to see all that she was and is everthing that she will be and can be.

for that minute i was at peace with my self for that minute was more then i could have hoped for.

when you get that minute of peace in your life what will you do next?

will you see the love she has in her heart for you or will you just see her body and flawless looks knowing that you can have her as long as you want?

if you can see the love she has for you then you will see all of her you will see

that when you look at her after that minute is up she will still have all that you want and need.

but in that minute if you just see her flawless body when that minute is up you wont see that see has what you need and want but you will see that in time her looks will still be the same but when you look at her your heart will be in

a world that will only let you be sad for you have lost her love.

you may have her body but with out her love you will never be happy.

so what will you see when you look at your dark angel in that minute of peace?

Answer 1

it would b better for a poem to have brevity,style,form,meaning,rythmand metre.now u know how it is.ok.it is good.the labour invested in creating such a nice thoughtfull work is itself its reward.

Answer 2

Its choppy and hard to read

sentences and verses run on to each other

and Its really hard to follow

Its a good point though

you just need organization

I'm sorry to be harsh..hope this helps