What do you think.....children's poem?

Question

SNOOTY JOODY

Snooty Joody walks around with her nose high in there air,

Snooty Joody doesn't know it's rude to sit and stare.

Snooty Joody picks the flowers out of someone else's garden,

Snooty Joody will bump into without the politeness of a "pardon".

Snooty Joody will take the last cookie with a smile,

Snooty Joody will pass on her bike and make you walk the last mile.

Snooty Joody doesn't hold the door open for old ladies,

Snooty Joody likes to hear crying from poor little babies.

But one rainy day, Miss Snooty Joody went out into the cold,

And forgot her umbrella, sadly, as the story is still told.

She still walked with her nose high up into the air,

And drowned, she did, without her umbrella, because she just didn't care.

Now, my children, there's a lesson to be taught,

And a lesson learned does pay.

If your a Snooty Joody too,

Stay in on rainy days.

Answer 1

that was really good i think kids will get a laugh out of it and enjoy it very much

Answer 2

Snooty Joody will bump you (Take out "into")

...giving you a sarcastic smile.

Snooty Joody rides her bike while you walk mile after mile.

...for feeble old ladies.

...for poor distressed little babies.

...into the rain filled air.

Now dear children...

...leaned and remembered will always pay.

Don't be like Snooty Joody or you will be caught

With rain in your nose on one rainy day.

The suggestions will bring your lines into more equal length, and caught will rhyme with taught.

But they are only suggestions to a poem that cries out for pictures after each line or two.

Well done

Robert