What do you think? just a five minuter?

Question

All my life I have been your rock

ready to steady your waivering soul

trying too hard to help block

all the things that could cause a hole

weathered and jagged edges about me

as I have stood on the front line

obstacles and high waters confront me

but I stand firm, with you behind

ready to battle, come what may

to make sure, all the while

you stand sure, out of harms way

with that warm and trusting smile

Answer 1

Poetry shows good strength and genuine battle of protection. I have no intention of a gender battle here, laugh, but to me so many strong words in one poem lean toward masculinity. What’s your thought of softening some of these words, (rock, wavering soul, block, jagged edges, front line, obstacles, ready to battle, harm’s way) up with a more subtle, gentile, loving and romantic approach? You are standing by your man because you love him, aren’t you? Many would oppose my view! Keep up the writing. Still unbelievably good.

Answer 2

It's a beautiful writing. Suggestions only. Rewrite 2nd verse, take out the hole. Define with a better descriptive word.

Answer 3

That's great for taking only five minutes. It's about friendship or a relationship, right?