What do you think?? just to let you know im not suicidle.?

Question

I cant take this anymore.

I'm going to kill and fall to the floor.

Your words really hurt when you treat me like dirt.

What am i supposed to do?

Just suck it up?

No.

I am not that tough.

I cry deep inside,

my tears i try to hide.

I cant handle all this pain.

The things you say,

the places you hit.

All feels like a ton of brick.

Its too much it cant be lifted.

All this burden,

all this fear.

It's to weak to be living here.

Around strong people all day long.

No more talk no more song.

You keep talking to me.

After i said let me be.

Words come out,

that should stay inside.

Been holding them in for a long time.

I regret all those words,

all those sounds.

Should of been kept in.

Never been found.

The tears of shame roll down my face.

Live it up cause for once i am the disgrace.

You laugh and laugh.

saying i though you were tough.

i then give it all up.

i Run to the knife,

ready to fight my life.

Slit where is needed,

my heart stops beating.

No one cares,

they keep on living

Answer 1

In my opinion, there's nothing distorted about your thinking. It seems very well-written and clearly thought out.

It got a very good message across, whether or not anyone else thinks so.

Answer 2

It's hard not to think your thinking is a bit distorted with words like this. This is a dark poem. These words just don't come from nowhere. You either want shock value, or this is how you feel deep down. I can write a little dark too, but this is a little over the edge. It need not sound like some of these horrible songs out today to sound good.

Answer 3

IT WAS VERI GOOD AND PASSIONIT BUT MY ONLI PROBLEM IS IT WAS GLOOMI U CULD GO FAR WITH POTRY

Answer 4

you mite be suicidal,you mite not be it depends on if you did write that for fun or you really feel that way

Answer 5

is this a poem????????????

Answer 6

Wow !! how old R U any way!! Strong feelings! R U talking about Ur first love? It looks like it. I don't call it poem, I'd rather call it " explosion of feelings".