What do you think of my Christian/religous poem?

Question

"WWJD?"

What if we could fly away

Away from a debt we cannot pay?

Get a glimpse of Heaven's Gates

Initially assume our fate?

Would you take my hand

Fly away if you could?

Would you get down and pray where our Lord once stood?

Would you allow Him to heal you

And kiss your cheek

Would you let Him get down

And wash your feet?

Don't you feel it?

Do you not think it's true?

Or would you only believe if you touched His wounds?

You silly child, His love is a promise

Jesus forgives all, even you, a doubting Thomas...

Do you believe His Father reigns in the sky?

Would you believe it was for YOU that He chose to die?

Would you still worship God if people thought you a fool?

Or refuse Communion if it made you look cool?

Hold my hand, let me take you away

Let me show you Heaven, and tell me you'll stay

By the power of His love, He rose from the dead

By the power of the Holy Spirit, He was conceived

And in the name of our Saving Grace

We invite YOU to believe

Answer 1

It was good.  Only thing I'd maybe alter a bit is the phrase "You silly child," only because I'd want to draw the reader to Him, and not distract the reader with a wee bit of an insult.  I know that's not your intention. Thx for sharing.

Answer 2

i really really liked it!

ur talented.

Answer 3

I LUV IT!!!!!! You should try to get it published!!

Answer 4

You go Emily, kudos to you, we need more   Christians like you.  Thank you for your time.

Answer 5

i think its a nice poem but im already christian and i believe

Answer 6

If you want the poem to be more accessible even to "doubters" that you speak off you may want to tone down some of the references. It sounds like a sermon