What do you think of my Con-Verb?

Question

I'm very new to this Con-verb thing, and I want to make sure I got it right. I would appreciate feedback. Thanks.

Daddy

Bite your lip

Hold back your tears

And wait

For him to finish

Answer 1

I think TD invented the Converb for light subjects

This is very sad, since I suspect it refers to child-molestation, I may be wrong, it may just be making the child wait until the Daddy has finished speaking, but I suspect not

(I'm not an expert - I've starred this, hopefully Elaine Polin or TD will pick up on it and give you the definition)

Answer 2

Granny is right. A Con-verb should be more direct. This is more like a good poem. The flagship Con-verb, CV-1, goes like this:

Tobacco

Became the bad guy

When John Wayne

Got lung cancer.

They are meant to be wisdom in reverse.

Answer 3

Sounds like me at a Karaoke bar.

Answer 4

The Con-verb, as its inventor states is "a contrary proverb." It should involve some kind of controversy. No one can argue about this one.

Keep trying, you will master the form.

Answer 5

Here are some I posted a while  back.  Yours fits, sadly, but fits.

If it only takes one to kill

then please tell

why you need an Uzi?

Politicians…

always indignant

when not in power

Tattoos…

vivid memories

of stupid times

Honey, I’m pregnant

Rejoice…

we just spent $400K

If it’s a golden age

then why am I

still searching for gold?

If gray hair means

wisdom

than why can’t I

find my keys?

Celebrate the Fourth of July

Be patriotic…be American!

Enjoy the fireworks…

they’re from China

Answer 6

Best I've read today. Conveys a strong emotion in very few words.

Not sure about the converb thing - but really your poem is good so who cares what pattern it follows ?