What do you think of my Trigee?

Question

Diamond found.......................Amongst the coal,

Precious stone.......................Worth more than Gold,

Ring of love............................With radient beauty,

You and me...........................Joined by soul.

Answer 1

You have mastered this form. I am learning from you. One of these days, I'll write one with a strong second stanza.

Answer 2

Very nice.  I'm not really well-versed on trigees, (no pun intended) but I like yours.

Answer 3

I like.  You could try placing 'for' before 'you and me' for flow.  Radiant instead of radient.  Now go polish your diamond for this has shine!

Answer 4

This is one of the best that I have encountered of a form which I often dislike, because I feel it goes against the rubric that form follows function. I consider a trigee a success if the combined form is at least 2/3 as good as the separate components. This one seems to be in excellent balance. But still, the trigee is not as good an idea as fueling an auto with cow manure.  

Answer 5

Good enough

Answer 6

Nice Trigee!  Very spare, rhymes in the third....I like it very much!