What do you think of my edited version of (Hope, Faith & Charity poem). Cheers : )?

Question

Please provide helpful sugestions that can inprove this poem or any meter/flow or other problems this poem may have.

Hope, Faith and Charity Poem by Tia Metcher (Galactia7).

Hope is to wish we find true love,

Faith is the belief that we do,

Charity is love and hugs that we give,

Smiles and laughter ------shared between two,

Hope is to see a better day,

Much better than the pastel grey,

To give a cure to those who sick,

To rescue those amongst the riffs,

Faith is shared amongst beliefs,

It gives us strength when we are week,

Gods grace within his rainbow token,

His promise to us will never be broken,

Charity is the donation of love that we give,

Raising smiles and laughter for those who in need,

who’s desperately deprived of loves happiness,

it’s free to donate and to receive as a gift.

Cherish to hold, spirit turned gold,

Let beauty within, you shine,

Nothing in this world is worth more than gold,

Than the love between you and I.

Cheers : )

Answer 1

awsome !!!

Answer 2

aww it`s beautiful with a lil fixer upper this poem will be great to hang on the wall.

Do you know the all to famous poem called "Footprints"? Well, this one is just as good in the positive message, and cheer it brings.

I would purchase this poem in a frame to hang, (the edited version, of course.....)

And the real cheers is to you in the end, because of the cheer you  bring to us here, with such thoughtful poetry, and with your thoughtful answers.

Thanks!

Answer 3

Very nicely written.  Faith, Hope and Charity are words we have heard, and hopefully practiced, but this gives more meaning to them.  Thanks for posting.

Answer 4

I must say that I like it very very much. It is so nice and positive. Bringing nice emotions...

Please could you have a look at this?  http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

What is your opinion?

Answer 5

Now it's complete :)  You've done a wonderful job with the revision and have created a very lovely poem.  Lovely write.

Answer 6

I hope you don't mind, but I did some editing of your verses.  You have some nice lines and images.  Each thought could be made into a poem itself as part of a set.  This has promise, keep reworking to make it shine.

Hope is to wish we find true love,

Faith is the belief  we do,

Charity is love and hugs  we give,

Smiles and laughter shared between two,

Hope is to see a better day,

Much better than darkened grey,

giving cure to those who are sick,

rescuing those amongst the rifts,

Faith is shared amongst beliefs,

gives us strength when we are weak,

Gods grace like his rainbow token,

His promise to us never to be broken,

Charity, the donation of love  we give,

raising smiles and laughter for those in need,

that are deprived of love's happiness.

It's free to give and  free to receive as a gift.

Cherish is to hold a spirit turned to gold,

Let beauty within you shine,

for something greater than all the gold,

is  the love between you and me.