What do you think of my poem? Please dont be too harsh?

Question

Words are flying Hearts are breaking

Eyes are welling

I expected but was clouded by hope

The slim hope that he would change

He would change...

For me

For him

For us,

Our screams become one

Tears fall like salt rain

What had I not seen?

The signs were there

He made it clear

But hope blinded me from his faults

I saw what I wanted

He did as he wanted

We are both to blame...

Please! Oh please dont be too harsh i dont claim to be a avis poem writer but this just kinda came to me

Answer 1

its kind of generic. good for a first time poet. atleast it didnt rhyme

Answer 2

But it doesn't rhyme . . .

Answer 3

the metaphors and strong words are brilliant but just work on you rhyme scheme

Answer 4

I like it-- I mean, trust me i'm not an artsy type. But stuff like that in my life has happened, so I can relate to it. I think that's something that alot of people will like about ti is the fact that they can relate. The whole not rhyming thing makes it cool too.

Answer 5

I think its quite good indeed =] And poems don't need to rhyme.

Answer 6

UHM........