What do you think of my poem. (Seculars Beware)?

Question

God please help me, with this frustration

I can’t overcome my temptation

Take away all distractions

Take control of all my actions

Ease my pain, ease my strife

Just take control, of my whole life

Please don’t leave, I need you to stay

Don’t leave my side, and don’t ever go away

With your help, I can succeed

I know that you provide, everything I need

I know you’re listening, and that you are there

So please God, listen to my prayer

Answer 1

beautiful

Answer 2

A beautiful poem of surrender and hope.  It is a more sustaining visual than one of despair. God Bless ♥

Answer 3

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 4

This poem is pretty good in my opinion. Of course, I have a tendency to hate it when people rhyme 'strife' and 'life'. Here are a few things I didn't like:

'Don't leave my side' and 'don't ever go away' is kind of like you're repeating yourself.

Same thing with 'ease my pain' and 'ease my strife'...A good excuse to find something else that rhymes with life! (try rhymezone.com)

Finally, you overused commas everywhere. Good luck on your poem; you do have potential.