What do you think of my poem? (Unfinished poem though)?

Question

I

I stand by the murmuring sea

As it sleeps to the gentle breeze

The sun drifts low in a ruddy pool

Sinking below a shimmering line

The horizon being so smooth and fine

II

And lo! The velvet vault appears

Finely adorned with diamond glints

And o’er the silent grayish pool;

Is the nighttime sky that gleams

And with the hushed voice of the sea

I fall into my drowsy dreams

Answer 1

I love this! So evocative, bloody brilliant writing...thank you for sharing!

Answer 2

Sweet, romantic and beautiful. Your language and images are excellent. Well done!

and

Keep the stream of poetry flowing....

Answer 3

wow!!!

that was great!!!!

i usually don't read poetry but that drew me in... great job!!

keep up the god work, you should definately be a poet if you arent' already! ;)

Answer 4

Wow! That's great! I particularly like the last two lines of the second verse/stanza.

Please finish this - I'd like to hear the end!

Good luck

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