What do you think of my poem about super heroes?

Question

Super Something

The Super Hero inside of me

A savior lost to immorality.

Another sin of relativity

A silent tale of chivalry

Confused soul of a vigilante.

Bad Guys bite the dust

And to dust we shall return

Some will fly and others burn.

And where will God put me,

Confused soul of a vigilante?

Answer 1

Pretty good though I have to say that the two 'fifth lines' make it sound a bit awkward to me.  I know diddly about poetry itself and how this type and that type work.  I only know how they sound to me.  Your content I like but as I said.....it's not quite there imho.

ps. still heaps better than I can do!

Answer 2

good. i like it. but it is slightly juvenille.  i do like it though.