What do you think of my poem i?

Question

The love that I have for you is crazy

I never thought I would be calling you baby

Or even how I call you babe and I love the way you say my name and every

day and night I think about us being together and I know you hope we'll

be forever I wonder what's the first thing ill say when we meet or i

wonder what ill do I hope ill be able to speak to you but I think your

probably be expecting a kiss or two or maybe even a hug since I know

you've been longing to wrap your arms around me for a little snug and by

the end of the night I'm sure we'll be making love and then we'll cuddle

and fall asleep and you'll wake up with my soft hand caressing your soft

cheek and before you can speak ill tell you those 3 little words I love

you and I hope you'll be saying I love you too...

as u can see i did write it for someone who means alot to me but what do you think do you think it needs some improvement somewhere i keep thinking that im repeating some of the same words or do you think its fine

Answer 1

I like the words! The format needs some work, it all runs into each other. These wouldn't make bad lyrics for a song either. I like the descriptives, it makes me think of my husband :D

Answer 2

Punctuation would be a good start. Plus you should probably look up the difference between your and you're. Other than that it sounds good. I hope you think twice about the making love part though and if you do decide to do it, please use protection.  I've read so many pregnancy questions on here from young girls that it makes me want to scream.