What do you think of my poem

Question

its just kinda one of those you just go with the flow

haha

its not perfect or anything it took me like 5 mins to write

but how do you like it?

Wouldnt it be great

if we could pick our fate

wouldnt it be nice

if we could live life twice

i wish all our dreams could come true

and all our worries would be threw. cause

every lie i said was true.

and every song made someone

strong helped them threw the day,

and every grey cloud went away, cause

the time we spent blue turned into something

new and helped us threw the day.

Answer 1

awesome i love it you poetic personn you:)

Answer 2

nice poem I enjoy it keep practicin u have potentential 2 become a great poet!

Answer 3

4th line from the bottom. its through not threw.

but good poem.

Answer 4

umm it sounds nice but it depend what type of poem you are trying to write. At the beginning you were using AABB rhyming and than you just stopped but the idea is beautiful :)

Answer 5

Yea that is pretty good, i was thinkin it was gonna be corny(like most ) but it was.....it was beautiful ;( ........ jk i didnt cry, but yes it was quite good

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Answer 6

Its beautiful.

Answer 7

wow amazing in 5 min? wow, u wat would make the peom better? a great title. u really have a talent, write more peom and go to peom cafes and maybe get a book of poems published.

Answer 8

its awsome, good job=)

Answer 9

i like

completely

understand it

deffenetly good[=

Answer 10

Yeah!I feel the same way!

Answer 11

whoaaa

nice =]

its really good. deep. awsome.

Answer 12

wow it's great