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What do you think of my poem:Divorce?

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cant you feel me crying

cant you see the blue sky

why me?

cant you set me free

cauz' i became so numb

i'm livin' in fright

i became so tierd

so mad that you lied

cauz' every thing i thought we would be.. is falling apart right in front of yoooooou

i'm just out of control

i cant be your cool

you're just killing my soul

i want divorce

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  1. nice........

    I dont think we should continue on how its going

    I just cant deal with this anymore and i know its showing

    Why did this have to happen to me

    I cant do it anymore

    i just want to be free

    now that the feelings had been torn

    But i want you to continue

    on your ongoing course

    and  the paper's are on the table

    I'm filing a divorce

    srry i just had too

    but yours it good

    i just luv writing poetry

    srry


  2. This poem is very good

    it sends out a message about divorce.

    The first two lines are about not showing

    of feelings along with the inability of seeing the

    blue sky

    Going through

    You are asking why me

    Cant you set me free

    This is talking about one person who either doesn't want a divorce or the other person torchering  the other one

    This is causing a lot of stress

    because feeling numb

    being frightened

    its draining you out

    leaving you tired

    You are angry because of the lies

    The life you looked for is coming apart at the seams.

  3. Not so good.

  4. I don't know. Its a good start. I think if you made it rhyme it would flow better. Try again... Just my opinion

  5. sounds harsh.

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