What do you think of my rap?

Question

The Takeover

I’m going in for the kill

Taking over Queen of the Hill

I’m blowing grins out char grill

No smiles for what you’re about to feel

Total domination

And from your lack of observation

Your time is up, I won the nomination

Because the people want something real

They want something they can feel

They’re tired of the talent less

So now I should dismantle this

I’m a musical terrorist

And I dare you to better this

R U out of your mind, U need to visit a therapist

I may sound rude, and put you in a bad mood

But I’m coming through

And to conclude you are screwed

Can you please give me your honest opinion. I know I'm no 2 Pac, Biggie and all the other greats... But I tried LOL. Can you tell me what was good and what was not?)

Answer 1

umm the lyrics are OK it all depends on how it sounds...

Answer 2

I agree with the reading and hearing you spit them theory,

I also had a hard time right out the gate with "I'm blowing grins up char grill"

I dunno if I'm missing something but it seems like your just trying to rhyme with "queen of the hill"

maybe say "Im blowin' up like Chernobyl" cuz that was kind of a big thing... it was a nuclear reactor and it blew up and all.. so thats huge.....

and if you use that you can send me royalties.

Answer 3

its wack dawg. JK its good  

Answer 4

goood

Answer 5

its great but you got to make it longer

Answer 6

its good. i mean theres room for improvement, but there is everywhere in anybodys rhymes. keep at it. your doing good.

Answer 7

reading raps and hearing you spit em, are two different things.....

so i suppose im indifferent