What do you think of my writing style and poem?

Question

The Defilement of Her

Burn a hole through me, what you do is as bad as a cigarette burn on my forehead.

Label me what you want, your opinion will never change no matter what I do with my future.

Yell at me all you wish, 20 years of it equals I’m tuning out… finally

Incarcerate me with your power, take my keys, and watch me burn

Let the flowers on the table wither away

Let the bookshelves grow dusty and diluted with asbestos

Let the joyful songs of the four year old girl disintegrate into the muted air

And let the sparkle of her dreams become invisible to her freshly blinded green eyes.

But this is all in her favor…

…For you only wanted the best for your first born experiment.

Answer 1

Oh my God this was such an intense poem I loved it.  Just one thing I don't understand.  Well a few things I don't understand.  So when someone takes your keys do you like spontaneously combust or something??? Oh and about the last line.....were you a test tube baby or something????

Answer 2

Well, It's deep and poetic,

it made me tingle,

I really loved it

you look like you're good,

Why don't you try me?

and judge by your own.

it's not a master piece,

but I tried my best to make it interesting.

I know you'll read it

and hope you'll like it.

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Thanks!!!

Answer 3

good