What do you think of the poem l wrote for my dad for fathers day.?

Question

For my dad, the grandfather of my children.

I stand on the shore,

and look out across the sea.

In the corner of my eye,

l see you standing by me.

A great big man,

you are,oh so tall.

You will always pick me up,

should l tumble, should l fall.

My hand gets lost in yours,

as you wrap it around my fingers.

Long after you let go,

the feeling of safety and love still lingers.

You are always very funny,

with those silly things you do.

This is why dear Grandad,

I forever will love you.

x*x sandi.

Answer 1

Heartfelt and I'm sure appreciated greatly by your father.

Critique....It read like you tried to work it to rhyme.

Line 6...use either 'big' or 'great'...not both.

Line 7...the 'oh' is totally out of text.  That emphasis is not necessary.

Otherwise it's the heart that counts.

Answer 2

ah....