What do you think of the song i wrote?

Question

I just can’t love you

your smile makes me smile

and your laugh makes me laugh

and the way you make me feel

makes me think its all unreal

and the way you love me

makes me want to love you back

but i cant

ooh I try so hard but its just too impossible baby

just too impossible

it hurts to say I cant but I really cant

ooo x 3

(chorus)

i just want you to wrap me in your arms

and tell me that there’s no alarm

and we can stay here through the misty storms

and you’ll keep me safe and warm

simple things like the way you talk

makes me wanna just stop the clock

stay in the moment that ide live forever

just as long as we were together

me and you could make love true

as long it is just me and you

you know that’s how I want it

to be now forever and always

ooo x 2

(chorus)

i just want you to wrap me in your arms

and tell me that there’s no alarm

and we can stay here through the misty storms

and you’ll keep me safe and warm

you see even though I feel these things

I just cant help not lovin you

Why wouldn’t I want to

You are you and you make my heart true

But baby it just can’t be like that

Nooo x4

Answer 1

it's ok

but too cliche

i feel like i've heard it a thousand times

Answer 2

Truth?

I didn't think it was that good.

Answer 3

wow

its really good.

i love it :]

Answer 4

   this is great! you might want to consider changing your title of your song to I just can't help loving you. just a idea. make sure  your song is copy written so no one can take your lyrics. Good luck!  

Answer 5

It's pretty good.

Keep it up. =)

Answer 6

a little sappy

Answer 7

uhm...

honestly, it's not that great. hate to burst your bubble.

and it doesn't make sense. How can you not love someone, but at the same time "me and you can make love true"?? What?

on a good note, i think with some tweaking your chorus could actually be okay.

Answer 8

it sux