What do you think of these poems?

Question

~anger~

the anger that I have

Its thundering in my brain

there is lightning in my eyes

and its is downpouring into my heart

and is embeded deep in my veins

the anger that was caused by

you is ruining me deep inside

I dont think ill ever be the same

its hollowing out my insides

numbing me so I dont feel

anything but

the anger that I have

Its thundering in my brain

there is lightning in my eyes

and its downpouring into my heart.

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~blade~

the smooth sharp metal sliced swiftly across the wrist

a quick intake of breath is all that is uttered

the blood drips down on to the cold smooth tile

the tears flow down a cheek

the pain is in their eyes for anyone to see

arm raised the smooth sharp metal is

sliced swiftly across the wrist one

more time.

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death

stops people in there tracks taking young and old

sometimes quick and painless other times long and agenizing.

Death cuts through people like an invisable knife always sharp

and hurting everyone in its path.death can come softly and

quickly and unexpectantly or it can come hard,long and expectantly

.death is a scary word but death happens everyday

death

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friends till the end

photographs were lost over time

are laughter has faded into nothing

are smiles have dissapperd into memory

seeing each other less and less over the years

but your heart is silently praying you will still be remembered

by those you once considered your best friends till the end.

as you remember distant recess's of the past

where the only thing you can remeber are smiling faces happy laughter

and playful screaming as you played king of the hill,tag,and simion says,or

pushed each other on the swings or chased each other over the jungle gym.

Highschool and middle school changes everthing where new faces replace the old

and new photos ,laughter and smiles and memories are made but deep down your

heart wonders are you remebered by the ones you remember saying we will be best friends foreverno matter what till the end to.Your heart rejoices when you see one of the people you havnt seen since you where ten walk into 4th period bioligy and say hey i remember you .

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September

September

the autumn breeze is sweeping up the

summer air september is here.the once

green leaves of the giant trees are turning

beautiful vibrant colors of yellow,orange,and

red.school is starting again in the crisp

autumn air. it can only be september!

september

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Spring Limmerick

I am a beautiful yellow daisy

And today I am feeling quite lazy

swaying in the great big wind

hoping that my life wont end

cause i am wonderful crazy

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i would apreciate some feedback thank you

Answer 1

They are awesome

I am VERY impressed!

They are so cool!

Keep writing you are awesome

Hope I helped

-♥ Taylor ♥

Answer 2

Good poems, but you might want to think about vividness. Poems can be so much more fun when only some of the stuff is interpretable, meaning try not to make it too descriptive, because then they can become dull and uninteresting. Examples  from 2 of my favorite songs " Shower in the dark day, clean sparks diving down, cool in the waterway where the baptized drown, naked in the cold sun breathing life like fire"

"Once again you see an in, discolored skin gives you away, so afraid you kindly gurgle out a date for me"

People want poems to be interpretable, but you don't have to give everything away. Just something to consider.  

Answer 3

It is very depressing.  people like things that make them happy or feel good about themselves.