What do you think of this? (Be nice)

Question

Alone in the Dark

I walk and I talk, throughout the day

But at night, in the quiet,

I am alone in the dark,

Where no light shines

I look for the hope that once I knew

But at night, in the quiet,

I am alone in the dark,

Where no light shines

I long for the faith that I once knew

But at night, in the quiet

I am alone in the dark

Where no light shines

Answer 1

its great. i like the way that you kept the last three lines in each verse, but changed the first. maybe a few more verses?...

Answer 2

nights and their darkness are the shelter of every torured soul!! why to abuse the beauty of the moon and the feelings of its solitary. . . without these dark hours we would not even appretiate the sun rays nor any could write a poem. . .

Answer 3

its very good

reminds me of some dickenson classics mixed with henry thorough ...

i would say you have a good chance of being published ,

submit to the 'writersguild.com' for consideration ,

my girlfriend is a member longstanding and they publish new talent all the time

good luck

Answer 4

its good

Answer 5

that's quite good :)

Answer 6

I certainly enjoyed it

Answer 7

It is nice.

Could be turned into a song.

But too many repetitions for good poetry.

Answer 8

wonderful!!!!!!!!!

Answer 9

its alright : )

Answer 10

Pat,

I think I understand what you are experiencing. I'm a Christian and we all go through periods of questions and doubts.

Do you think you could perhaps add some more to it to let us in on what is causing you to feel as you do?  I like what you have started with and just because certain elements of your poem have been stated before it doesn't make your feelings less valid - or your experiences.

Emo means a person who is highly emotional or going through a moody period - it can be negative or merely descriptive depending on attitude of the person using it.

Too bad about the rudeness of a few, so unnecessary, so childish!

Answer 11

EMO

Answer 12

It's Ok

Answer 13

It's deep, that for sure. Reminds me of Evanescence. It voices the deepest need in every human being: salvation