What do you think of this Prologue to my book?

Question

I'm writing a book that i want to publish online......

its kinda Zombie Survival/Thriller Type so tell me what you think of this prologue:

Prologue

It wasn’t like you see in the typical horror movies. The hand coming out of the grave or the flood of them… the ‘Zombies’ I mean, coming around the corner all at once. The governments did a fine job of covering up the attacks as and I quote: “A cultist wave of cannibalistic attacks on random citizens”. Not just the American government but every government. I was an expat in Egypt when the ‘Honest Liars’, as the survivors that I have been around call the government, stopped trying to hide the inevitable.

As I said before I was and still am an expat in Egypt. Then again I’m an expatriate to a no longer existing government. From the radio broadcasts, that I have heard, the political system in America and many more countries around then world have collapsed. Now in many wastelands that were former countries they have Factions or Gangs that hold certain areas of the wastelands that claim leadership.

My Father was a Geologist before the first signs of the breakout had even arose. He was assigned to Cairo, Egypt so my whole family went with him. This included Me, My Brother, My Dad, and My Step-mom. My parents had a divorce when I was at the age of……I can’t even remember now. The Divorce seems like a whole other lifetime ago. I’d see my mother every summer and Christmas that was until Egypt closed their borders and airports to prevent the infection from spreading further into Egypt. That did no good, The Egyptian Scientists were confident the virus was airborne. They were wrong. It was transferred through the Saliva or spit if you will.

My Name is Zac. My name is Short for Zac. This is the story of my, and others like me, survival. Before I can tell you how I survived I must tell you how it begun. It began as most things do, with a mistake. A really, really big mistake

Answer 1

You are very lucky indeed because you happen to be talking to someone who is OBSESSED with zombie movies (and books)!!!! I've watched/read em all. Even the old George Romero ones that are all grainy and in black and white and you can totally tell whats going to happen before it does.

So your prologue got me excited. YAY ZOMBIES

And it was pretty good to boot.

But a few things made me a little weary.

It gives a lot of big promises to the reader right off the start. You're basically telling me that this is going to be unlike any other zombie book I've ever read, and lemme tell you right now, I doubt that! Not doubting faith in you, just....I've read a LOT....

It also seems like you're a little too obsessed with the plot for it to be a prologue. The thing I love about writing prologues is, its all sparkles and **** and pure inspiration. You're basically showcasing your writing skills, giving the reader a little match in the dark, and then blowing it out. At this point, I just want to be drawn in. I don't want to hear about your past history. I've just picked up this book for heaven sakes! I haven't made that kind of commitment yet. want something exciting, memorable, that will make me read more.

Anyway, I like it. Would love to read more.