What do you think of this? a really short writing...tell me if i need anything to change?

Question

Do you think that you are just like a random person? Or just different one?

Will I think I kind of am random but sometimes different, because I am really shy , friendly, and smart girl.

I really don’t know why but in my opinion that most people are not like me sometimes. These are the reasons why most people are not like me.

First thing that their name is not “Nasiba Taimur” and they don’t have accent when they talk in English.

Also I am very shy person, so in my opinion there must people like me. I really don’t like to get attention and

Talk loud to people that I have never met. I sometimes want to talk to new people but somehow most of the time its really hard for me to do that

I think I just don’t have the courage most of the time to go and talk to strangers, this is why sometimes I feel bad because I can’t do that which I want to do it at the same time. This should be my goal, to go and talk to people without blushing and talking in a low voice.

I know like 99.9% of people might say they are nice, or friendly, will I think I am one of them. I really like to help people with things and just do a favor for them. I just love to show people that I really am a kind and sweet person who really wants to be friends. I simply love to do good things, that’s all what I want to do for my self and others.

Do you ever look at your paper and say “ wow I did all those things?” will if did or didn’t, I do that most of times, that why I think I am a smart girl. I think I’m not completely smart, but just smart enough because I really work hard in my works that I do for school because I really want a good job and future and everything. All of my efforts will pay off later, so that’s why I push myself and try to get the best grade that I can. Every time I shoot for a better grade, I really want to accomplish my goal for the future, so that’s why I need to be a smarter girl next time.

After I read this paper I just thought to myself that I really am a random but different sometimes or most of the times then other people that is around me. I really am looking forward to see any changes in the next few years, I think about 3 years so that I might see if I got better progressing in meeting new people, being friendly all the time, and also accomplish my dream goal.

anything that i can add...or change

thanksss soo much =)

Answer 1

There were a few mistakes, so I corrected it for you.

Do you think that you are just a random person, or a different one?

Well, I think I am kind of random but sometimes different, because I am a really shy, friendly, and smart girl.

I really don’t know why, but in my opinion most people are not like me sometimes. The following are reasons why most people are not like me.

First of all, their names are not “Nasiba Taimur” and they don’t have an accent when they talk in English.

Also I am a very shy person, so in my opinion there must be people like me. I really don’t like to get attention and talk loudly to people that I have never met. I sometimes want to talk to new people but somehow most of the time it's really hard for me to do that.

I think I just don’t have the courage most of the time to go and talk to strangers; this is why sometimes I feel bad because I can’t do that. This should be my goal: to go and talk to people without blushing and talking in a low voice.

I know that about 99.9% of people might say they are nice, or friendly; I think I am one of them. I really like to help people with things and just do a favor for them. I just love to show people that I really am a kind and sweet person who really wants to be friends. I simply love to do good things, that’s all what I want to do for myself and others.

Do you ever look at your paper and say “Wow, I did all those things?” Well if you have or haven't, I do that most of the time, that's why I think I am a smart girl.  I don't think that I'm extremely smart, but just smart enough because I really work hard in my works that I do for school because I really want a good job and future and everything. All of my efforts will pay off later, so that’s why I push myself and try to get the best grade that I can. Every time I shoot for a better grade, I really want to accomplish my goal for the future, so that’s why I need to be a smarter girl next time.

After I read this paper I just thought to myself that I really am random but different sometimes or most of the times than other people that are around me. I really am looking forward to see any changes in the next few years. I think about 3 years so that I might see if I got better progressing in meeting new people, being friendly all the time, and also accomplishing my dream goal.

*My note:  I think it's a really nice essay, and you have a great personality that shows in your words.  Good luck!