What do you think of this character description?

Question

i have a summer reading assignment to do and this is basically the description of one of the characters. keep in mind that i am only 14 years old so don't be surprised if it is not so hot.

The Member of the Wedding

by

Carson McCullers

1946

The novella's protagonist is a sheltered 12-year-old girl named Frankie Addams with a spitfire persona. Her mother was tragically deceased while giving birth to her. It would be appropriate to conclude that her father is a remote, configuration of a human being. She has no friends as she is secluded from the world and lay in despair, desperate to grasp some form of connection to the world beyond her home premises. She frequently fantasizes about bypassing, what according to her, is a stifling ontic. She fantasizes of going away with her brother and his bride-to-be on their honeymoon and following them to the Alaskan wilderness. Her most contiguous comrades would be the family's black maid, Berenice Sadie Brown, and her six-year-old cousin, John Henry West. In this novella, Frankie Addams will face obstructions dealing with the topic of “life” but nonetheless, master the ability to cluster her double personalities, naive and stubborn, but willing and determined, so that by the end of this novella she will gather most of the idiosyncrasies that compose the sophisticated and impeccable young lady.

Answer 1

Wow, thats not bad!

It realy took me to another place.

I also relate. good job young lady :)

Answer 2

It's excellent...I really like your usage of words..

But I found a tiny mistake. Intstead of "bypassing, *what* according to her..." I think it should be "which".

Anyway..Your description exceeds the expectations of a 14 year old!

Answer 3

I have been teaching high school English for 22 years and have rarely seen such a well-written piece from an incoming freshman.  This is quite an accomplishment.

Answer 4

PLEASE SPEAK ENGLISH...

just kiddin.. lol it was awesome... how come u r just 14 and still manage to write what we elders still cannot even thinking of writing.. i wish u all the best...