What do you think of this essay?

Question

http://www.helium.com/items/866224-jared-weight-blood-pressure

Answer 1

It's okay.

Be a rebel.  Always ask questions.

I hate it that everybody always takes every advertising campaign as the truth.  I consistently dis-believe in all advertising campaigns until I've had time (and interest) to research the matter myself and form my own opinion.  (This is why, for instance, I don't like any of the presidential candidates yet.)

Meanwhile, I want to thank you for introducing me to helium.  I never heard of it before.

Answer 2

There are a few spelling/grammatical errors

Answer 3

It's a brilliant piece of article and well supported. But I think Sara, you should check the spelling errors as there are couple of them there. Also, some of the quotes are not in the right place.

But overall, a nice article.