What do you think of this little poem?

Question

I wrote this little poem the other day and think it's not too bad but not too good either. I am simply practicing and would like some comments and suggestions to improve this and my writing style. Please give me some honest feedbacks, but if it's really horrible, please don't be rude~!!

P.S. I am 15-years-old

Thanks lots for comments and suggestions!!

Here is the poem:

You went away so long ago to the Front,

a place you’ve never been.

You were brave but not blunt,

and fought for the win.

We now stand gazing around the trench,

hearing violent noise and beating rain.

Remembering that you didn’t flee with the French,

when there were gas, death, and pain.

We came to notice,

of the love and courage you gave.

You stood above all like a lotus,

taken up Vimy Ridge when being so brave.

The Great War was finally won,

through the hardships you had to bear.

We’d remember you for all you’ve done,

and please know that we really care.

Answer 1

great poem!

Answer 2

Wow, this was really good.

A very good topic to choose.

I don't really have anything to say that you would need to fix up.

Just keep writing, your work will become better in itself.

Oh but one little thing maybe try working with syllables, it may make things a little smoother.  But it's really nothing big.

Great job : )

Answer 3

I was writing poetry like this in the third grade. Being fifteen is no excuse for bad writing.

Answer 4

wow, no don't change anything, it is great.  the only thing I'd do is change "when there was gas, death and pain." But all in all you have a promising future as a writer.

Answer 5

this is very good and interesting, keep up the good work! :)