What do you think of this love poem?

Question

Well I wrote this a while ago... and I've decided

to see what people think about it. :]

Like a bite from a vampire's teeth,

Forever for never to leave a scar.

From love, or from hurt.

To be read on your face, or to be laid on your arm.

Is it that small blade, or his piercing eyes?

Haunting you like a bat in your head.

Forever there...

Never going, never dying dead.

That small slit,

Or that small kiss.

Sending ice through your body,

Love... and hate falling even deeper into this endless

abyss.

So, it was off the top of my head.

What do you think?

Thanks.

Oh and please read my other poem too:

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20080709233323AATB2Br&pa=FYd1D2bwHTHzJb9gE.s9QXw3O3rv3S9shyUpe6LQH5AoXg--&paid=asked&msgr_status=

Thank You!

Answer 1

use of  thrustful love word is absent

Answer 2

it's a really nice poem and I like it a lot.. but my brain's a really slow processor so i'm not sure if i understood correctly what you're trying to say..

is it that you love him and hate him at the same time? or do you love him but you hate the feeling? or am i completely off the mark?

im so sorry.. maybe i shouldn't be commenting at all lol... but i just wanted to say it's actually very beautiful and if i really get it, then i know it would sound even more beautiful to me.. :) but of course, as i keep saying to myself a dozen times, i like a lot of things so.. don't take it from me.. lol...