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this is something i wrote last year at the end of junior high,

i swtiched schools after i was being harrassed.

and this is what i felt like in my new school.

"The Act"

I play a game.

every morning that game starts.

and as soon as I hit the road I read my lines in my head.

ill be happy. ill shine. they wont know how much I hurt inside.

where I came from;;I hit every rock and fell

Every time I bruised my heart.

I didn't fit in certain places.

I could say no to what was "cool"

but I couldn't stand up for myself.

I felt like a fool

I thought it would be better if I came to this place.

where everyone had class. s*x wasn't a race.

but to soon figure out.

too soon figure out. what life was about.

so I pull open that door.

wipe my tears.

put on my mask.

and play an act.

I'm pretty good

and I try to stand up straight

thinking about the good things.

but as I get home.

I remember the act I played.

how you don't know who I am.

I'm afraid I’ll get knocked down

I'm usually quiet.

just like my mom

if you've known me before I decided.

I had no mask.

I was the real girl.

I played no act.

but when morning comes.

the routine starts over.

I sit up in bed.

and go under the covers.

I don't come out until you are far away

I cant be me.

I have to act this stupid play.

this mask is ugly

its not who I am.

will you still love me..

will you laugh.

will you tell?

if I can be myself.....

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Answer 1

Excellent piece! Your use of words made me feel just like the girl in your poem. That&#039;s excellent when you can make your readers view their selves right there. And this was an excellent topic of choice to write about. Sadly, you are not alone in this. There are a lot of girls (and guys) who have the most horrifying experience in High School and that&#039;s suppose to be one of the highlights in your teenage years. I do hope you don&#039;t spend all four years like this. I wish you the best and keep your sense of writing style. I love it and it works!!!

Answer 2

I like it