What do you think of this poem, be honest?

Question

I had a dream

I had a dream…

In that dream

I saw

Lights, shooting stars

Everything nice.

But-

What if

What if this dream

My dream was for real

What if it came true?

What if it meant something?

But-

Not all dreams come true

and

not all fairytales have a happy ending

But-

I know, that this was just a dream,

Because in this dream

Love meant something

It meant something to you

Something to everyone.

I saw them,

You know the lights

The flashing lights

The way they hit you from everywhere

They way they hit you

I just stood and stared

In my dream,

I cried

Not of sadness

But of happiness

For the love that you shared with me

So bright, red, blue, orange, green, purple

Everything nice.

But the more I think of it and smile,

The more I remember it was

Just a dream-

Nothing more

nothing less

I saw my heart

My heart burned

Burned of the love I felt for you

The thought of knowing that,

You weren’t coming back;

The pain

My tears flowed over

My heart

I saw it

In my dream,

My heart was Soothe

Answer 1

You are a creative writer you are in touch with your spiritual side you love dreams,  they are your past ,present and future you have the idea of poems but poems can be as short as two lines try making short poems their more direct,  such as    Burned of the love I felt for you and thoughts of some day A return was do

Answer 2

i liked it alot  :)

keep on writing, dont let what others say put you off

Answer 3

the last 4 verses were fine, but i dont see the point of the rest of it?

Answer 4

I hate it, sorry but I really do

Answer 5

I think you spoke your mind .You spoke out and it was really good ,honest

Answer 6

It's not bad.

I see what you were trying to do with your structure, but it makes it read rather choppy. The theme is nice and you have handfuls of nice lines, i just don't find this to be the best set up.

Answer 7

no offence is u wrote it but to me its rubbish but its just not my sort of poem. im sure there ar many out there would appreciate it much more than me.