What do you think of this poem, what does it seem like. Criticism is reluctantly accepted?

Question

Laughing at the things you do to make me smile

Just knowing that we’ll be together for really quite a while

Fickly forming rain clouds have in no way ever looked this good

The raindrops land on our head with a pitter and a patter

But it’s gotten to the point where it just doesn't matter

I just know now that if I could put my arms around you I would

We walk home together, disregarding the chilly December weather

I can’t even measure the numerous times it’s been a pleasure

It feels like heaven not having to be home until seven

You look cute, a fact nobody could ever refute

The way you look practically strikes me mute

These rainy days have their ways

Of making me think of you, thinking forever true

Answer 1

I don't have a doubt in my mind that this is, and would do much better as, a song. It's way too simple to be a good poem.

Some people might have seen me say this before and I will say it again, if the reader has to work at understanding the poem just the right amount, along with clever wording, it will make the poem that much more interesting.

The structure and format was acceptably consistent and the idea was a very enjoyable concept.

80 out of 100. This is just an opinion, if you don't agree, that's fine. But, what good is literature without opinion?

Answer 2

seriously dude, that poem was phenominal, it rhymed and it was cute,man, if sum made this for me i wud melt 2..... im at a loss for words dude, this poem is really cool.....i really hope you make more like it or just other poems,theres alot of good poets( like @ndii, you gyz shud go pro like make a book 4real!) and poems out there but this one rocks out loud..... email me back plz...

Answer 3

It's rely sweet! I like it!

Answer 4

this is beautiful, you should make a song

Answer 5

its okay in my opinion. its kind of cliche to me, but i have a thing against rhyme :P so good work!

really it is very good! i told you, i'm biased. listen to them, not me. if thsi is your first "real" poem then i can't wait to see more of the later!

Answer 6

awwww this is so sweet

i like it alooot.

if a guy ever wrote me a poem like that

that'd be so sweet

very cute