What do you think of this poem? Also a name for it...?

Question

I wrote this poem for my girlfriend in ohio ..(long distance girlfriend) what do you think?

Falling as

I sit,

Fingers frantically typing,

Heart quickly beating,

Face forever smiling,

Knowing she will always be on the other end.

I can see her hand,

Holding an invisible string,

A string connecting our hearts,

Our fates,

And one day our lips.

Oh, how mine hunger to touch hers.

I look down at my hand,

And feel the invisible line,

The connecting line.

She slightly pulls,

And i draw closer to her,

And closer,

And closer,

Until our hands grip each others,

Our lips graze each others.

Finally no devices are needed to hear her say--

No need to type the words--

No camera needed to see--

she's falling,

For I can see and i can hear,

When she says the words so sweet,

I can finally fall deep into her eyes,

And I finally get to l**k the sugar off her lips,

The sweetest sugar left from the sweetest words;

I love you.<3

Answer 1

its Excellent i reckon you should call it the sweetest girl

Answer 2

I think your girlfriend will love it.

What about &quot;Unseen Connection&quot; for the title?

Answer 3

I agree with dialgaX, the name &quot;sweetest girl&quot; does match your peom...good luck...^_^

Answer 4

eeeugh!! pass me the bucket!! cheesy and predictable springs to mind!!! sorry!!