What do you think of this poem I found?

Question

Broken

I'am broken unspoken by these feelings that won't seem to go away. I wait for them to each day but they keep coming back. I still don't understand. Why I care why should I? When the time for you caring is over and I'm broken. But still I promise myself to learn to grow a heart because I can be a bi@#$ sometimes. I say sorry to you first because you deserve to be said sorry to. I could have had but I was to scared to tell you how I felt and now it's to late. She took what I wanted and should have had. She made it her job to make you her man and I sat back and watch. As she got you and I got sad like a a-s-s knowing you never see. I smile in your face because i am broken because of you. I now know I'm broken because I just don't want I need you.

Answer 1

its ok but something like this would be better

I'm broken

I go  unspoken with these feelings

that won't  go away.

Time and again they come

But I push them away

I’m broken

No one cares anyways

My heart still grows

Sometimes it fades(the bi@#$  part haha)

I'll only say sorry to you

I was scared of you

Now its to late

You even moved on

While I sat back and watch

My hearts broken

I smile so you don’t think anything is wrong

I now know that I don’t want you

I need you!

Answer 2

It's okay.. You need to practice more. Make it sound like music.

Please comment mine.

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Answer 3

To be honest I don't really like it at all.

Answer 4

Lynds nailed it.

Answer 5

Martyrdom at its best!!