What do you think of this poem? This is my first attempt... can you arrange it?

Question

I was sitting in my class, bored, and it was my English period and i started writing this and it turned out to be like this:

Oh, the agony and the pain,

Of bearing our English teacher who is so lame

I doubt it even if she knows the meaning of teaching,

Her teaching is more like as if she's teasing.

Oh! She doesn't even know who's good in her subject,

All she does in the class is complain and object.

She is so lazy and too, so slow

We have had to bear her for 2 years, Oh BLOW!

What her name is wouldn't you want to know?

Well, she is dear Mrs. Williams for you!

P.S. I know its rude, but i just wrote it for fun. And this is my first attempt at writing a poem, and it seems more like normal sentences than a poem!

Please, i would really appreciate it if you could just arrange it for me into stanzas! Thanks a tonne!

And please, do comment and tell me what you think!

Answer 1

out of shape .. some one is complaining .. but again U were board.. what 'd U expect ?!

Answer 2

how about this...

Mrs Williams

oh the agony

oh the pain

bearing our english teacher

who´s  just so lame

she knows not the meaning of teaching

it is as if it is a tease

not knowing who is smart

all she does is complain, and object

oh, my english teacher

always acting lazy

always moving slow

having to bear her for 2 years

i just want to shout ``OH BLOW!``

´´What is her name?´´

wouldn´t you want to know....

well you may call her....

Mrs. Williams

i gave it a title of Mrs Williams of course you can change that acuttally you can keep the poem the wway that you have it but let me suggest on more title ´´Dear old Mrs Williams´´ or ( ok i lied 2 titles) ´´old mrs williams´´

i kinda switch things around a bit but i think i did an ok job!!! you can change around the words if you want i changed some of it around but its saying what you did and i made sure to use every describtion and all the words that you used though i changed some of their places..... have a great day!!!!!

Answer 3

An English Teacher, not!

There is pain and too much agony

from the bearing of her manner

for she is too lame, slow, and lazy

and two years of her

is too much to bear

too high a price

for a young soul to pay

for a teacher that knows

nothing of her craft

and nothing of her subject;

and little of my misery

how can I be expected to learn?

to be inspired?

with the magic of words?

Yet I sit here,

trying my hand

at playing with words

a poem born out of my misery.

If destiny be on your side,

avoid her

steer away from Mrs. Williams’ class

for she is all teasing

and boring pain.

A poem can take any shape or form, be a story, short or long, rhyme or just have an easy flow; it can also be the lyrics to a song.   This is not my best, but its another way of saying what you felt in Mrs. Williams class.  Cheers to you for writing your poem.

Answer 4

lol  funny.