What do you think of this poem/piece of writing I wrote?

Question

i just wrote this and i don't really know if it's any good or not. i would really love some HONEST opinions. do you guys understand this? does it sound good? does it suck? thank you so much for your help.

btw here click this link,

the whole thing couldn't fit on yahoo!answers.

http://img65.imageshack.us/img65/1037/12471581gv1.gif

does it even make sense? do the vocab words and stuff even make sense?!!!!!! is it contradictory?

give me your HONEST opinions,

thank you veryyyy much. i appreciate it.

btw there were 2 typos,

-towards the end the "trasing" should be "thrashing"

- from "maybe i only feel this way" to "maybe only i feel this way."

Answer 1

I write a bit, and am always interested when someone is brave enough to submit their work through this venue.  Most of it is insipid, but your work is stunning!  Keep it up, dear; you have a gift.

Answer 2

I thought it was very nice. I write alot of poetry, have for years. It doesn't matter if it makes sense, if it's contradictory. Free verse really doesn't have set vocab. Poetry is an expression of your thoughts, feelings, dreams and unless you are entering into a contest I wouldn't worry about the technical stuff. Writers Journal is an excellent source for writing info, I have a subscription. There are other mags that are just for poets too. Hope this helps.