What do you think of this poem ?

Question

this is my first poem and i would like other peoples opinions :D

i know this quite girl,

who drowned in all her fears,

but all she wanted was,

to held back all her tears

at night you'll hear her cry,

but never say goodbye,

you might think she wants to die,

but your thought is just a lie.

she never wanted suicide,

especially with a rope,

because somewhere in her shattered heart,

held just a bit of hope.

hope you liked it :)

Answer 1

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!

Answer 2

sad but great

i am a singer and i think you have great artistic and writing ability

please write me a song

just reply one of my questions with the song

that's how you can get it to me

thank you x

Answer 3

"You might think she wants to die / but your thought is just a lie?"

Feels like you got tired of trying to write the poem and just filled in a couple of things that rhymed to get it done.  I have no sympathy for that kind of laziness; you need to have more respect for and dedication to your writing.

Answer 4

sorry, your grammar blows.  quite = quiet.  I understand the sad thoughts you are trying to convey, but a brief course in English 101 would benefit you.

Answer 5

Its nice

Answer 6

I don't think it was too sad, it was interesting, like somewhere there is a story to accompany it.

Answer 7

this is a pretty poem.

very sad.

Answer 8

omg! i luv it. it reminds me of someone i use to know.  i miss her dearly.