What do you think of this poem? (written by a 15 year old)?

Question

Any constructive poem would be appreciated :]

Also a possible title?

Thank you.

Our blind love constantly comes to mind, love.

You and I combined, you and I intertwined.

We were designed to be a perfect kind.

With you, I was in bliss,

With every touch and every kiss.

This can’t be dismissed, since my feelings still persist.

I know it's dumb of me to keep doing this,

To constantly reminisce.

You always manage to be in my line of vision,

You and me as a beautiful collision.

I wish I didn’t make such a ****** up decision.

I just want the world to reset because losing you is my one regret.

I’m upset, and I just want to forget.

Give me the alcohol and the cigarettes.

No, I don’t want to forget a single emotion

Or both of our devotions despite outside commotion.

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Although I seem to be sedating and innovating,

I actually am hating that I keep on restating

How I’m still hoping and waiting.

But I swear I’ll always care.

We’ve been through enough despairs and scares,

And I hope you’re aware that I’ll be there.

You are my air, no one else even compares.

We act as if we’re through,

But I really hope that isn’t true,

We were a perfect two,

And so badly do I want to be with you.

No matter what it costs,

My optimism will not soon exhaust

Because I don’t believe that all hope is lost.

I’m keeping my fingers crossed.

Answer 1

Wow that was very good.. and very nice rhyming.. I have poetic friends that their writing cant even touch that! and their in highschool! :)

as for a title what about "I'll always be there" or "you and I" or something like "with hope"

Keep writing your very good

Answer 2

its rlly nice